Anukul was born in a joint family in Kolkata in their
ancestral home at Hajra. It was a huge mansion with a big courtyard surrounded on four sides by
spacious rooms and another walled courtyard around the exterior as well.
The mansion had been home to his last 5 generations. They had been a wealthy
reputed family of zamindars. The wealth accumulated was enough to keep Anukuls
next 2 generations well fed and in luxuries.
The mansion now housed Anukuls’ old grandparents, his
Kakus (uncle) family and his own family. Anukuls’ kaku though younger of the
two brothers had a bigger say in the household activities and decisions. His
father being a simple man never really bothered or interfered in the house
matters. Anukul could sense that in spite of the love between the two brothers
his uncle did enjoy the supremacy and look down upon his father as a simpleton.
He had managed to live with that but what he could not bear with was his cousin
Raja.
Raja was a year older to him. Right from the time they
were kids, Anukul had hated Raja. Raja was always the school topper. He was
brilliant in all the sports he played.
Raja was the perfect well-spoken, well groomed boy, teacher’s pet,
family’s pride. Anukul on the other hand was brilliant but he preferred not to
study. He had an extremely sharp, political and manipulative brain but he
preferred sitting on the school wall with his friends playing pranks. Though good
looking, he was extremely unkempt. In fact he was quite an uncouth hooligan. It
was his rebellious attitude that made him indifferent in competing with Raja.
He just did not want to be like Raja
Yes Anukul hated Raja. Anukul hated being compared to
Raja. Anukul hated being told by everyone to be like Raja. What had increased
this hatred manifolds when he overheard his parents say that they wished they
had a son like Raja.
As they grew up, this hatred just kept increasing. In
college all the pretty girls would hang around Raja like accessories while no
one would give a second glance to Anukul. Even from home Raja got the best
clothes and perfumes to wear. He got hefty pocket money. Life wasn’t easy with
Raja around. Raja knew of Anukuls hatred but was indifferent towards it. In
fact he quite enjoyed being the supreme of the two and never once lost a chance
to humiliate Anukul
Anukuls only solace was his best friend Soorjyo. He was
extremely affectionate towards Soorjyo. Soorjyo was a smart, handsome and a
charming being. An excellent student and extremely dedicated to Anukul. They
always hung around together and stuck by each other no matter what. Such was
his dedication to Anukul that he shared his hatred for Raja with equal totality.
He hated the way Raja behaved haughtily
with his best friend. There were times when Raja had even taunted Soorjyo for
being friends with a dimwit like Anukul. This had made Soorjyo loathe him. How
he wanted to get back at Raja someday for demeaning Anukul. How he wanted to
harm him. Soorjyo, while he was normally a quite sensible person who wouldn’t
harm anyone, he participated whole heartedly in making plans with Anukul to
make life miserable for Raja.
And now with the course of time and situations galore,
they had found a bigger, much bigger reason to despise Raja
In their para (locality) stayed Jagyaseni. Jagyaseni was
a woman of fiery beauty and intelligence. She was graceful. She had the looks
and a body to die for. There were many who desired her…. Oh no! Anukul was not
one of them, but Soorjyo was.
Soorjyo had been mesmerized by Jagyaseni from the time he
was in his adolescence. Her very sight made him forget everything around him.
He fantasized of holding her and kissing her tenderly. He wanted her to be a
part of all his thoughts and dreams. He dreamt of spending the rest of his life
in her arms. He wanted her to be only his. Oh he was madly in love with her.
Shy that he was he had never expressed his feelings to her for many years.
After being coaxed, cajoled and finally threatened by Anukul, Sooryo finally
approached Jagyaseni. As it turned out that Jagyaseni also had suppressed undercurrent
attraction for Soorjyo and thus started a beautiful love story. And as we can
guess, the villain in this love story was Raja.
Raja was enchanted by Jagyaseni. He had tried to woo her
number of times through a number of ways but Jagyaseni did not show any
interest. So when he got to know about Soorjyo and Jagyasenis relationship, he
was filled with wrath. To own Jagyaseni became a challenge for Raja. He desired
her even more. Now it was pure lust. And lust as we know cannot be resisted. So
he decided to go to any measures to possess her. He befriended her brother and
charmed her parents. He portrayed the perfect son in law picture to them. He
showered them with gifts. Smooth talker that he was, he indulged into charismatic
conversations with them. And soon they grew very fond of him. All this while
Anukul, Soorjyo and Jagyaseni had no inclination of Rajas intensions
And so when Jagyasenis’ parents informed her that they
had decided to marry her off to Raja, she was devastated. She tried very hard
to reason it out with her parents but it all fell to deaf ears. They blatantly
opposed their daughters’ commitment to Soorjyo. For them Soorjyo was wasted in
the company of Anukul. They would hear none of it. The shattered Jagyaseni
rushed to Soorjyo. When Soorjyo and Anakul heard the entire saga, they were
furious. Eloping was not an option. Jagyaseni would just not hear of it. They
decided to go speak to her parents. But both Soorjyo and Anukul were humiliated
and threatened by them. Anukul could not bear to see Soorjyo in despair, in
depression.
On the other hand Jagyaseni was locked up in her house. The
family had started making major preparation for the marriage. Both the families
had met discussions were happening every day. Saris and jewelries were being
shopped for. Jagyaseni refused to give her opinion on anything. She would lie
heartbroken, weeping in her bed cursing Raja. She was even contemplating ending
her life before Raja could touch her with his filthy hands.
Even at Anukuls house preparations were on at full swing.
He was angry, very angry. He refused to be a part of any activities at his
mansion. He ignored all especially Raja, the reason for his anguish. He decided
he would not be around during the marriage.
Soorjyo, well he was just keeping himself to himself,
lost in his thoughts, kept walking all over Kolkata aimlessly.
Finally it was the day of the marriage. The entire
Mansion was decorated with marigold flowers and strings of lights. All the
family members were dressed in best of the attires. The women adorned
themselves with gold jewelry. Everyone was in high spirits. One could smell all
the traditional Bengali dishes that were being prepared. Sounds of music and
conch shells filled the house. There was laughter everywhere. The place was
full of life.
In his room Raja was lying on his bed. His eyes wide
open. Empty, hollow, as lifeless as the body to which they belonged.
Very interesting....I like the way you give the reader the liberty to think in the end of your each story
ReplyDelete:D Thanks Subhro... so what did this make you think at the end...
DeleteGood concept; open to interpretation... we could tighten up the prose a wee bit. And a couple of typos (deaf years/deaf ears... 'herbed'/her bed)
ReplyDeleteCheerios!
Thanks Mlvk... agree on tightening the prose bit... corrected the typos... :)
DeleteLoved the concept. The characters could have been more three-dimensional, though.
ReplyDeletePoint taken, Abhishek... Thanks :)
Deletehey diptee...i love reading your blog..infact i have been following them since the last few months...n i eagerly wait for a new write up..just love ur writing style...:)
ReplyDeleteThanks Faiza... that's very encouraging... keep reading... keep commenting :)
Deletenicely written .......a lil predictable perhaps
ReplyDeleteBut anyway well written
Thanks koolkats... Thanks for the feedback... :)
DeleteI liked what I read but it was not enough Dip-tea... At the same time I would have sent my gunman if it was Anukul murdered Raja (certainly I won't mind that but it would ve been too predictable a climax).
ReplyDeleteI think you are a lazy bum who just didn't want to make an effort to give an interesting end to the story. Bad !! Please finish it.... tell us it was neither Anukul nor Soorjyo.
No comments on your writing skills though.. (am in no position to do that actually :)) But you deserve lot of credit for making me think. :) I wonder what makes Raja - the villain, his success and glory or his loathe for hooliganism and irresponsibility or was it his obsession with jagyaseni. And what makes Anukul the hero.. Another thought, Soorjyo apparently is not as smart, his friendship is blind...
You know what, I really believe that it wasn't Anukul or Soorjyo. I think it was their servant who had a secret crush on Jagyaseni... or maybe it was Jagyaseni, herself. You think it's possible that Raja committed suicide :D
DeleteBut thanks, I really like the fact that it made you think so much :D
I hate inconclusive stories. If I have to think so much,then I might as well take the pain to write it...FINISH IT. good concept, awesome patience,but...
ReplyDelete:D It's no fun if it does not make you think. Thanks
Deletechange the names, that will make it less obvious, but keep one or two things that will work as subtle hints, write something about what happens after raja dies, does he have an extended journey like his counterpart in vyasa to both heaven and hell?
ReplyDeleteNot good, given your standards.
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